In this pitch, I tries to bypass as many pre-tenses as I could to go straight into my product. I also tried to describe my product as briefly as possible, avoiding unnecessary paused for explanation and some humor. What changed most about my pitch, was I imagined myself in a room full of investors for furniture. In this room, I didn't need to go over the basics of furniture, as they would already know what I am talking about. Instead I focused on what makes my product unique, as well as why they should invest in my product.
Hey, Lucas!
ReplyDeleteThank so much for posting, I really enjoyed watching your pitch. I thought you made the right decision in bypassing as many pre-tenses as possible, the conciseness of it keeps me engaged and interested. You've seemed to have fleshed out your idea more as well and it shows!
Lucas,
ReplyDeleteYour pitch was well written and even better executed. In this pitch I could very much tell your difference in tone and presentation. You sounded more professional, and you clearly connected yourself with the investors, making it seem more recruiting than informational. I enjoy seeing how your idea continues to progress. Well done!
Lucas,
ReplyDeleteThe edits to your pitch we very strategic and I believe they achieved your desired result much better. Your new engagement with the audience was evident and effective, and your overall tone and demeanor was up to par. Very professional and a great delivery. Well done.
Your pitch was very good, the way you progress through your business idea throughout the pitch was great. I thought that your comparison of the idea for your product with IKEA furniture was great because it showed how you are different from your competitors. Lastly, I would like to say that the flow, vocabulary, and they way you articulate your words really sold the pitch. Thank you and can't wait to hear more.
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ReplyDeleteHey Lucas,
ReplyDeleteI think your pitch was very well done and you did a great job with explaining your product. Your opportunity idea of easily movable furniture is something that people who move often can use a lot. I like how you went straight into your product and were quick and to the point with details. I also think it was great that you ended it by talking about why they should choose you to invest in.